Saturday, September 6, 2008
Leads Exercise #2 -- Air Crash
A US Air flight from Chicago collided with the ground yesterday outside of Pittsburgh as it was preparing to make a landing, killing all 131 people aboard in the most devastating catastrophe in the US in three years. The cause of the crash is still under investigation.
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Except for the part about colliding with the ground, this works well.
"Collide" implies that two things are coming together...but the ground does not move (except during earthquakes).
Of course the crash is being investigated -- so put that later in the story, not in the lead.
...most devastating air catastrophe
...in the United States (not US) -- see the AP Stylebook entry.
9/10
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