A newlywed couple's honeymoon got off to a bad start when a carjacker tried to steal their car in San Mateo yesterday evening.
The couple, still in their wedding finery, were on their way to the Embassy Suites Hotel when they stopped at a Taco Bell on East Fourth Avenue. According to police, the groom had just left the bride in the idling Nissan Altima when Alan Ticas-Soto, 21, sprang into the driver's side and put the car into gear.
Luckily, the bride was able to escape the vehicle before the carjacker slammed it into the restaurant's sign. Ticas-Soto, who later told police he was high on methamphetamines, fled on foot but was soon after arrested. No one was injured.
The suspect is now facing felony carjacking charges and misdemeanor drug charges. If he is found guilty, Ticas-Soto could face up to nine years in state prison for the carjacking. A preliminary hearing in the case is scheduled for May 10.
2 comments:
Good start to lead, but "were victim of" seems awkward to me. How about something like: A newlywed couple's honeymoon got off to a bad start when a carjacker tried to steal their car in San Mateo yesterday evening.
I'd also be interested to know that the newlyweds were still in their wedding duds when it happened. That creates such a great mental image that I hate to see you leave it out.
You could include at the start of P2: "The couple, still in their wedding finery, were on their way to the Embassy Suites Hotel..."
Fact error: The carjacker rammed the stolen car into a Taco Bell sign, not into the restaurant. (-3)
11.5/15 - You may want to correct the fact error and repost this assignment to improve your grade.
Much better! 11.5+1.5=13/15
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