Saturday, September 13, 2008

Leads Exercise #4

Smoking Wheels

Forty passengers were evacuated from a Northwest jet yesterday after an airport official saw smoke coming from near the wheels of the plane.

Northwest Flight 428
had just landed at the LaCrosse, Municipal Airport in Wisconsin, following a flight from Minneapolis yesterday when the plume of smoke was spotted. All 40 passengers were evacuated safely. The cause of the smoke is still unknown.


Missing Boy

A 7-year-old boy who was missing for three years was found Monday night in Brick Township, N.J. after a neighbor altered the police. The boy's mother has been arrested and faces charges in conjunction with the kidnapping.

The neighbor recognized the boy's picture after it was shown preceding the film Adam: The Song Continues, a movie about another missing boy who was found murdered. The film is used to raise national awareness of the problem of missing children. Thanks to the film, the neighbor phoned the police and the boy was found with his mother, Ellen Lynn Conner, 27, who now faces charges of kidnapping and interference with a custody warrant.

1 comment:

camccune said...

1) Don't start a sentence with a numeral -- write it out (e.g., Fifteen not 15).

Say the official "saw" smoke, not detected it. (I'm assuming he saw it from afar, which is not detection.) You don't need to repeat the info about the smoke in P2.

2) Good job.

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